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Man_in_the_Hat
This is a poem i wrote when i got bored titled "You wouldn't know"

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You wouldn't understand the things i do,
the thoughts i think,
the feelings i feel.
You wouldn't understand the ryhmes i write,
the poems i read,
or the songs i sing.
You wouldn't understand, so i ask you not to,
I ask you to listen,
i ask you to feel,
i ask you to think.
But mostly, i plead you to think, listen and feel.
I ask you to understand this,
one feeling, one time, one place.
I asked you to take it with you, to let the thought live.
think about it, feel it, listen to it.
But when i told you,
you did not,
you laughed and scorned it.
As you walked away it floated on the breeze,
and slowly died.
You didn't understand
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doomjockey
It's ok, kinda like my art is ok.

Meaning good try, but there's always room for improvement. Improvement in the meter, improvement in the rhythm, and tweaking the word choice a few hairs to keep any unintentional repitition to a minimum.
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