[calliton]

this is the current script for an oblivion movie viceice and i are making
just looking for feedback (spelling and grammer will be fixed in final draft)

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written by: Calliton
mods by: Viceice
filmed by: Calliton






enter Chancelor Ocato's chamber

Hero approaches

Ocato: "Greetings, champion. I have an important task for you. You must go to Kvatch and close a new Great gate that has opened... you are our only hope."

Hero "I wont fail you, Chancellor!"

as the hero walks away, the chancellor starts eating a bagel


enter the great gate infront of Kvatch

Epic scene of hero running up to the gate
just as he is about to reach the gate, a smaller one opens up inside
the hero stops dead and says to himself, "This is almost as strange as the time i found a two headed scamp in my pants..." the hero charges in, flailing his sword as he runs to it, screaming like a little girl


he enter the gate to find a strange room...

zoom in on the desk
enter subititle "ITS A DESK* dramatic chord


The hero stops dead in his tracks and looks around
men in strange armor watch him, and a guy is sitting at the desk
the hero begins to talk to him.

MD "the gate you have tried to access is currently unavailible. This is due to matenence on the gate. The gate's five million year sigil check is due, and it has a faulty spark plug."

Hero "What is a spark plug?"

MD "a spark plug is... a little thingy that makes a spark and plugs a hole... i think. Anyways, this is the mythic dawn customer service. Would you like a tour of the facility?"

Hero "Uhm... sure..."
the hero sheathes his sword and follows the agent down a corrider with windows showing a group of mythic dawn eating bagels and reading porn (lusty argonian maid will suffice)

at bagels:
MD "this is our employee lounge. today Zack brought it bagels for everyone"

Hero "what is.. a... Bay-gull?"
MD "Its a round peice of break with a hole in th emiddle"
Hero kills an agent and takes the bagel "Amazing..."
Hero kills the other two and eats the bagels "I must have more..."
Hero looks around desperatly, but instead of a bagel, finds a strange book...
hero reads it, and his pants fall off "What is this... amazing book? Am i looking through a window into some one's room?"
MD "No, thats just porn. lets keep moving."
hero "Amazing... all the girls in vanilla oblvion have them the same size... and a bra stuck to their skin... amazing."

at the surgery watching room
MD "This is where we take care of our injured, as magic seems to not work in here. Oh look, Gunnar is getting his left kidney removed! Would you like to watch?"
Hero walks up "WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO HIM! HE'S GONNA DIE DOWN THERE!"
hero starts hitting the unbreakable glass with his sword "DONT KILL HIM!"
MD "We are removing his kidney, it is badly infected and cannot be healed with magic"
Hero "but... you cut him open... like in deadly reflex only... less bloody."
MD "Actually deadly reflex just uses mashed cranberries."
Hero "So... ive been drinking canberry juice when i cut a gaurd's head off and get blood all over me?"
MD "Yes. You drink it?"
hero "blood gets in my mouth. Especially when i slaughter the people of Anvil. WHEW those guys can bleed!"
MD "Lets get back to the lobby now, the tour is over."


back at the desk
"My god... bagels... porn... and succefull surgery... my life has been a lie..."
the hero takes a moment to compose himself...
"I must prevent this from getting out to the world..."
he draws his sword and kills the mythic dawn in the room.
he then takes the sigil stone out of the desk and escapes
outside, he is thrown a geat distance and wakes up in jail.
Hero "Gaurd! Gaurd! why am i in prison?"
Gaurd "For possesion of pictures of the chancellor having sex with his wife, and for having pictures of argonians with nipples... everyone knows those boobs are fake."
the gaurd begins to eat a bagel
the hero uses a spell and kills himself, lods a preveouse save and closes the gate


END CREDITS

[Argomirr]

Haha, hilarious! Can't wait to watch it!

[Pronam]

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enter Chancelor Ocato's chamber

I could just copy the one from EG....
As so many of those elements...it will be quite easy to do...therefore a bit of fun as well ...
Any advice or suggestions are highly appreciated.

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-----------------------------Progress/Requirements----------------------------

Kvatch rebuilt?
Great Gate
Summoning of the small gate

Mythic dawn Lobby
Mythic dawn Lounge->Bagels
Mythic dawn Surgery
Mythic dawn Lobby

Great Gate closes, hero gets trown out.
Jail,
Replay
Little Fight at sigil chamber, gates shut...
End..

[calliton]

not done, but i added more

[calliton]

finished rough draft is up!

[Pronam]

Hm..but what if the hero first runs trough the gate (as you can do now, but as if it doesn't work.)and doesn't get teleported.Then when he tries the other way (From the Kvatch-entrance its side), still nothing happens.. and THEN the little gate appears...? That would add a bit of realism...

I'll adjust my first post in here with any elements I need and what progress there has been.

[calliton]

its one of those things where he gets there just as the smaller one opens up
but ig uess that will work too, vice

[Pronam]

Hmm. and perhaps some other things before? Like if we use Kvatch Rebuild. (Or the ugly one).
No text, but just the summoning of the great gate.. screaming people and a second later, the hero is at ocato?

[calliton]

i cant get kvatch rebuit to work...
but it does sound good